Blog #11

Revised Dialogue Draft

INT. MASSAGE PARLOR-DAY

Scene opens as the camera focusses in on a man’s face that is resting in the head support of a massage table. A serene look graces the man’s face.

The camera shows PHOEBE giving a massage to the man on the table.

Soft music is playing in the background.

The flicker of candles can be seen dancing against the walls and ceiling.

The massage ends after about one minute into the scene.

PHOEBE

(In a whisper)

Thank you so much for coming. See you soon.

PHOEBE exits room.

Waiting in the lobby is PHOEBE’s husband MIKE. He is smiling and holding a single daisy that is being hidden behind his back.

PHOEBE

(Walking toward him with a flirtatious grin on her face)

Hi sweetie!

PHOEBE leans toward MIKE and gives him a smooch on the cheek.

MIKE reveals the daisy that he was hidden behind his back. He kisses her back and smiles.

MIKE

How is your day going?

PHOEBE

Great, but really busy. I have an hour before my next appointment. Are you hungry?

MIKE

Yes, that is exactly why I came. How does Italian sound to you?

PHOEBE

(Rubbing her stomach)

Perfect. I am starved.

While at the Italian restaurant, PHOEBE pulls out her iPhone and starts to read an email to MIKE.

PHOEBE

(Reading email on phone)

Dear Pheebes-

I hope this email finds you well. I wanted to invite you to the premier of my new movie. It is a romantic comedy about a plumber that falls in love with a millionaire heiress after fixing a leak under her bathroom sink. The female lead actress is a hottie!

It is next Thursday, so get yourself to LA.

See you soon.

Love,

Joey

PHOEBE puts phone on the table and looks up to see MIKE’s reaction.

MIKE

(Smiling)

Sounds like fun!

PHOEBE

I will book our flight when I get home tonight.

MIKE

It will be great to see everyone. It has been way too long.

PHOEBE

(Nodding in agreement)

Yes it has, yes it has.

Camera pans out the restaurant window and fades to black as taxi cabs and other cars drive by.

Blog #10

CHANDLER

Where are the stinking tickets?

ERICA

Oh, are you talking about these (sarcastically) tickets Daddy?

CHANDLER

Yes princess, these are the tickets.

Pilot

It looks like we have clear sky all the way to California. We will be arriving in Los Angeles around 4:32 p.m. local time. Now sit back and enjoy the flight.

Ticket Agent

Due to severe weather in the Midwest, Flight 828 will be delayed until 11:30 a.m. Sorry for the inconvenience.

Blog #9

PHOEBE

Hi sweetie!

MIKE

How is your day going?

PHOEBE

Great, but really busy. I have an hour before my next appointment. Are you hungry?

MIKE

Yes, that is exactly why I came. How does Italian sound to you?

PHOEBE

Perfect. I am starved.

While at the Italian restaurant, PHOEBE pulls out her iPhone and starts to read an email to MIKE.

PHOEBE

Dear Pheebes-

I hope this email finds you well. I wanted to invite you to the premier of my new movie. It is a romantic comedy about a plumber that falls in love with a millionaire heiress after fixing a leak under her bathroom sink. The female lead actress is a hottie!

It is next Thursday, so get yourself to LA.

See you soon.

Love,

Joey

MIKE

Sounds like fun!

Blog #8

1.) Good dialogue, keeps the story moving foward.
2.) Defines the relationships bewtween characters- emotional, physical, background.
3.) Monologue- shows characters private feelings. Sometimes can be shown in form of a voice over.

Blog #7

Opening Scene
Fast foward 10 years, the scene opens up to a backyard in the New York City suburbs. There are two small children- one boy and one girl, around 10 years old playing on a swing set. Its is a beautiful fall day and the sun has begun to set. Through the kitchen window, a women can be seen washing off vegetables to be placed om a simmering pot on the stove. The camera pans  down the driveway to see a black SUV slowly pull in. The two children quickly take note of the car and immediately rush to the driver side door.

Setting of Story
New York City, New York City suburbs, Los Angeles, various airports, hotel

Getting to know the Characters
Ross and Rachel decide to give it another try with their relationship after toss confesses his love to Rachel. They have two girls now, Emma and Zoey, still live in New York.

Monica and Chandler are adjusting to life with twins- Jack and Erica- and their new life living outside New York City.

Joey continues to pursue his career in acting and head to Los Angels to star in his own sitcom.

Phoebe marries Mike in a ceremony performed by Joey in Central Park.

Blog #5 Revised Log Line

A high school graduate orchestrates a large cheating scandal under the noses of the police, who are looking for the culprit.

Blog #4 Log line

A high school graduate orchestrates a large cheating scandal under the noses of the police, who are looking for the culprit.

Blog #2- Writing Goals

Hi again viewers!
This semester I want to really focus on achieving my writing goals. These goals would be variety and organization. When I'm writing i tend to lose train of thought or often at times I get stuck. This is where the goal of organization comes into play. I want to learn different techniques of how to organize my thoughts together so it instead of just listing out my ideas i have a good flow to my writing. I've noticed over time that my writings start sounding very similar and i begin to become very repetitive. With that being said my second writing goal of variety comes into play. I want to play around with new techniques and use different ideas in my class exercises. Also I would like to experiment more with some of the types of writings I haven't used or might not have become as comfortable with in the past. By becoming more familiar and studying these writing styles, I'll be able to prepare myself for bigger assignments next year in college. I hope that this course and my hard work will help me advance as a writer as well as a student. 

BLOG 1: Welcome Entry

Welcome everyone!
I'm Briana, a senior at Penfield High School. I try my best to always make the most out of everything even when its rough. I'm very social, often told a little too much at times. My family and friends are the most important part of my life. Without them I wouldn't be who I am today. This is going to be my blog, a free place where I can discuss my thoughts about different writings. I'm not one that does a whole lot of writing in my spare time, it's never been one of my strongest skills which is ultimately why I enrolled myself in creative writing. I hope to become a stronger writer after taking this class and be forced to think more creatively through my writing. Now you know a little more about me, I'll be posting more entries soon!