Saturday, May 26, 2012

Blog #11

Revised Dialogue Draft



INT. MASSAGE PARLOR-DAY

Scene opens as the camera focusses in on a man’s face that is resting in the head support of a massage table. A serene look graces the man’s face.

The camera shows PHOEBE giving a massage to the man on the table.

Soft music is playing in the background.

The flicker of candles can be seen dancing against the walls and ceiling.

The massage ends after about one minute into the scene.

PHOEBE
(In a whisper)
Thank you so much for coming. See you soon.

PHOEBE exits room.

Waiting in the lobby is PHOEBE’s husband MIKE. He is smiling and holding a single daisy that is being hidden behind his back.

PHOEBE
(Walking toward him with a flirtatious grin on her face)
Hi sweetie!
PHOEBE leans toward MIKE and gives him a smooch on the cheek.

MIKE reveals the daisy that he was hidden behind his back. He kisses her back and smiles.

MIKE
How is your day going?

PHOEBE
Great, but really busy. I have an hour before my next appointment. Are you hungry?

MIKE
Yes, that is exactly why I came. How does Italian sound to you?

PHOEBE
(Rubbing her stomach)
Perfect. I am starved.

While at the Italian restaurant, PHOEBE pulls out her iPhone and starts to read an email to MIKE.

PHOEBE
(Reading email on phone)
Dear Pheebes-
I hope this email finds you well. I wanted to invite you to the premier of my new movie. It is a romantic comedy about a plumber that falls in love with a millionaire heiress after fixing a leak under her bathroom sink. The female lead actress is a hottie!
It is next Thursday, so get yourself to LA.
See you soon.
Love,
Joey

PHOEBE puts phone on the table and looks up to see MIKE’s reaction.

MIKE
(Smiling)
Sounds like fun!

PHOEBE
I will book our flight when I get home tonight.

MIKE
It will be great to see everyone. It has been way too long.

PHOEBE
(Nodding in agreement)
Yes it has, yes it has.

Camera pans out the restaurant window and fades to black as taxi cabs and other cars drive by.

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